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The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in the US from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate the changes in the proportions of
energy
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 produced in the US between 1983 and 2003.
Overall
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,
in
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at
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period
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 hydropower was the lowest
product
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 in
energy
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production
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 in the
USA
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,
while
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 oil was the highest
product
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 in
energy
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production
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 in the
USA
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. In comparison,
at the end
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 of
period
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oil
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, oil
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still
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is still
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 the highest
product
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 in
energy
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production
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 in the
USA
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 and the lowest
product
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 still hydropower in the
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product
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lowest product
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 in
energy
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production
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 in the
USA
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.
In
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At
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 the beginning of
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the period
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period
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period,
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 natural gas was 11% and increased
10
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by 10
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percente
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per cent
 and became 21%. Nuclear power was 20% and increased to 24%. Oil accounted
42
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for 42
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% and decreased to 38%. Coal made up 23% and became 13%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, product, production, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy production
  • proportions
  • significance
  • notable increases
  • decreases
  • consistencies
  • emphasize
  • analyze
  • highlight
  • trends
  • emerging patterns
  • shifts
  • decline
  • rise
  • percentage
  • renewable sources
  • non-renewable sources
  • comparative analysis
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