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the maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now and plans for its development the maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now and plans for its development

The diagrammatic representation illustrates information about the layout of
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the southside
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southside shopping mall
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Southside Shopping Mall
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 in
present
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the present
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 times and its
proposal
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 changes for
development
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. A quick
galance
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glance
 at the diagram reveals that in present times there are department
store
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stores
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,cinemas,noodle
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shop
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shops
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,play
area
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areas
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,
cafe
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cafes
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,
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and supermarket
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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 present in
southside
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the southside
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along with
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 the car
park
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.
In addition
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, there is
golf
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a golf
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 course in
northeastern
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the northeastern
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 part of the map and
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park
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a park
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in
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on
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east
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the east
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 side. Analysing
further
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,as per the planned
development
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 ,the golf course in the north eastern part will be demolished and converted into
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a departmant
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departmant
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department
 store with its
seprate
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separate
 entrance.
Intrestingly
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Interestingly
,there will enlargement of
car
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the car
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park
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in
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on
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 the south side of
layout
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the layout
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 with
inclusion
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the inclusion
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 of
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a fintness
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fintness
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fitness
 centre and
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park
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a park
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 in it.In future planned
development
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,the play area,noodle
shop
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 and cafe will be replaced
into
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with
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beauty
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a beauty
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 salon,
shoe
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a shoe
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shop
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 and
info
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an info
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 centre.
Suprisingly
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Surprisingly
, the cinema in
present
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the present
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 time will
torn
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be torn
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 down into three various places
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such
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, such
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 as
cosmetic
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a cosmetic
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shop
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,
gift
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a gift
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shop
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 and
shoe
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a shoe
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shop
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 in future.The rest of
areas
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the areas
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 in
map
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the map
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such
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, such
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 as
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the supermarket
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supermarket
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supermarket,
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 will remain unchanged in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 time.
Overall
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,remarkable
development
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 will have been witnessed in the layout of
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the southside
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southside
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Southside
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 with the addition of new facilities in
forthcoming
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the coming
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 time.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words development, shop, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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