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Band 5

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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if
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people
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 should have more free
time
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 and a smaller number of working days. I agree that
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 a change is a beneficial one, because it helps to manage better how
people
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 feel
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, and
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 it does not impact
negatively productivity
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productivity negatively
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. Working fewer days reduces the
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 stress in society. Most
people
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 spend free
time
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 with their families and friends, which improves the way how they feel and increases their happiness. Being around someone they care about more often helps them to feel less stressed and anxious about their personal life.
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, most of them are reporting fewer health issues and experiencing more pleasure from
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.
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, the companies that tested a shorter working week have observed
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 number of sick leaves
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 decreased drastically,
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overall
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results
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 increased significantly
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 higher
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 output. Employees could deliver the same
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 in a shorter period of
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. When
people
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 are focused on a specific task
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 that should be achieved in a set amount of
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, they tend to
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 more effectively.
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, reducing a workweek by a number of days will have almost no impact on productivity and the company's
results
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.
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, several European countries have tested a 4-day workweek
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, and
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 companies have reported almost no drops in the
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 delivered by the workforce
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;
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 some even noticed an uplift in
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productivity. In conclusion, I argue that a shorter workweek has more benefits,
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 a decrease
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 stress and nearly no drop in
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 done.

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task response
Your answer shows a clear view on the topic. To reach a higher band, add more facts and more detail to back each point.
coherence
Make the flow of ideas smoother. Use simple link words and keep a tidy order of thoughts.
strength
Clear view on the topic
strength
Use of examples like sick days and a 4‑day week
Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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