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The chart below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mains features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar graph describes the difference in Japanese tourists travelling abroad from 1985 to 1995, and the line graph shows
Australia’s
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share
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 of
Japan’s
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tourist
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market
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.
Overall
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, the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad, and the percentage of
Australia’s
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share
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 of
Japan’s
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tourist
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market
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, witnessed significant fluctuation in the two countries.
While
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 the number of Japan and Australia tends to rise. In terms of Japanese tourists travelling abroad, there was an increase from 5 to 11
million
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 units between 85 and 90.
Besides
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, the data decreased from 11
million
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 in 90 to over 10
million
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 in 91. During the period from 91 to 91 of over 10
million
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. There was unchanged of 12
million
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 from 92 to 93.
Finally
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, the figures rocketed steadily between 91 and 95, from 12 to 15
million
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. Regarding the statistics of
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share
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 of
Japan’s
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tourist
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market
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, it jumped significantly from 2% in 85 to 5% in 89.
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, the number declined from 5% to over 4% units between 89 and 90.
Moreover
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, the values went up from 90 to 96 units , between over 4% and over 6%. Ultimately, the figures for
Australia’s
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share
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 of
Japan’s
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tourist
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market
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 tend to plunge from over 6% in 94 to 5% in 95.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia’s, share, japan’s, tourist, market, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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