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Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economics around the world.However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and environment is often ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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tourism
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 the
fastest growing
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fastest-growing
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industries
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industry
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 and
contribute
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has had
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 a significant
impact
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 to economics around the world. Not only to the economics it can
also
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impact
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 the local
cultures
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 and the
invorement
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environment
. Because of
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 there is an argument that
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says
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tourism
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 can cause
to
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harm to
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 local
cultures
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 and
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
 is often ignored. In
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essay
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people
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 will look what
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the benefit
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benefit
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benefits
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 and negative
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impacts
from
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 situation. As
people
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 know,
tourism
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is give
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gives
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 many
benefits
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 for
people
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 and
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
. Not only in
economics
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the economics
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 segment,
it
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but it
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also can
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can also
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give
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have
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 an
impact
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to
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on
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 local
cultures
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.
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 as,
people
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 can open a local culture or
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custom
tour
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. It can
gives
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give
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people
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 an income and make
they
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their
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 local culture more global or famous.
It's
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 not only
give
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gives
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 an
impact
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 for
native
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the native
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,
it
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but it
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also
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make
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makes
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an
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 benefit to
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tourists
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 who try the experience. If they like the
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tour
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tour,
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 they will share the
tour
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to
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with
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 other
peoples
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people
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 and make more
people
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choice
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 the
tour
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.
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,
tourism
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also can
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can also
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make
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have
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 a negative
impact
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for
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on
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 local
people
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 or
native
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the native
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.
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population.
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 Because not every
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tourist
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have
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has
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 a good attitude, they
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also can
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make
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cause
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 problems.
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 as, they destroy or
make
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cause
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a
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apply
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damage to local facilities, or they can share or teach
others
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other
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people
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 and native bad habits or bad things. Because of that, it can
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a
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have a
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boomerang effect
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local
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locally
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. If many tourist like
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 come to their place. It can make their custom,
cultures
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, and
enviroment
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environment
 in danger.
To conclude
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, there are
a
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apply
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benefits
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 and negative
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impact
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impacts
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 for
this
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 situation. In my point of view, there are more
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positive
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impact
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impacts
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 or
benefits
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 than negative for
this
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situoation
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situation
. Because of
that
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that,
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choice
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 to disagree with
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 statement or
agues
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argue
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. In my point of view, there are more
positif
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positive
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impact
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impacts
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 or
benefits
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 than negative for
this
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situoation
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situation
.

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planning
Plan your essay before you write. Show your view in the first paragraph and restate it in the last paragraph.
coherence
Use clear links to join ideas. Use words like first, also, but, however to make flow.
development
Give clear examples. Mention places or things and show how they affect people.
language
Watch grammar and spelling. Use short, simple sentences to avoid mistakes.
language
Check noun and verb form and plural use to keep form steady.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the issue.
argument
The writer shows a clear end view on the topic.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural commodification
  • environmental degradation
  • local economies
  • cultural exchange
  • sustainable tourism
  • commercialization
  • authenticity
  • destination overpopulation
  • tourist expectations
  • economic benefits
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