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Band 5

The pie charts shows the spending habits of people in the UK in 1971 and 2001. Summarize the information by slelcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The report
drives
Verb problem
presents
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 a pie chart which illustrates
spending
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the spending
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habit
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habits
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people
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of people
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 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in the period of 1971 and 2001.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that there are differences between categories, as some figures are higher than others and the data
not
Verb problem
is not
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 the same in all groups. On one hand, the period of 1971
the
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had the
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 highest
spend
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spending
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 habit in food, it recorded 44%,
while
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the
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apply
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cars 22% and the lowest spending
is
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was on
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 books
reaching
Punctuation problem
, reaching
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on
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apply
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6%.
On the other hand
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, in 2001, the spending
in
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on
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 food
fall
Wrong verb form
fell
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 to reach 14%,
while
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 spending
in
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on
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 cars has significantly increased to 43% almost
the
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apply
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double compared with 1971.
However
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, when we are looking for the rest of
figures
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the figures
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Punctuation problem
, there
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there
Use the right word
they
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 fall between
highest
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the highest
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 and
lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
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 values.
Although
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 some numbers are similar in each category
shows
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show
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 different
pattern
Fix the agreement mistake
patterns
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 over time.
To sum
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up
Add a comma
up,
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 we could say there are
significantly
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significant
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 differences between the
habit
Fix the agreement mistake
habits
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 in
the
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apply
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from
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apply
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the two years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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