The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about a
school
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called West Park Secondary and the shifts that happened there since its build in the year 1950.
Overall
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, we can see that the building and its surroundings have changed three times over the years;
also
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,
it is clear that
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there are some rooms that
did
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have
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not
change
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changed
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.
According to
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the data shown, the main road, the
school
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, and the playground all stayed in the same position throughout the timeline given. In 1950, there were some houses near the
school
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, and behind the
homes
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homes,
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there was a
greenspace
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green space
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named the farmland.
However
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, in 1980, the accommodation zone was replaced and cut into two
lands
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lots
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; one was for the car parking lot,
while
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the other
one
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was for the science block inside the
school
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. As for the farmers, it changed to a sports field. In the recent year, 2010, the playground space decreased even more;
in contrast
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, the garage increased more and more.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • renovation
  • expansion
  • modernization
  • infrastructure
  • landscape
  • facade
  • demolition
  • construction
  • alteration
  • amenities
  • accessibility
  • sustainability
  • curriculum
  • enrollment
  • pedagogy
  • architecture
  • commute
  • heritage preservation
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