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The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.

The maps provide key information about the progress of a college
campus
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 in 2010 and in present.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the
campus
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 in 2010 had few services.
In addition
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. It is not divided into specific facilities,
whereas
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 the
campus
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in
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is
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 present, the plan is modern, more clearir and has multiple spaces.
According to
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 what is shown in 2010, there was one student accommodation and university offices on the left
side
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 of the road. On the
right
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side
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, there was a small
lake
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 in the centre surrounded by lawn and a seating area.
In addition
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, there was a block for teaching arts and science in the front,
while
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 in the back, there was another student accommodation building. On the
right
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side
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 of the
lake
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, there were two small shops and a restaurant. In terms of the university
campus
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 now, there are two student buildings
instead
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 of one, and a new science modern building has
replaced
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been replaced
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 by university offices. On the
right
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side
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, the
lake
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 remained stable,
whereas
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 they deleted the green space around the
lake
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.
Moreover
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, the teaching block is changed to be specific to the arts. The accommodation on the
right
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side
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 is replaced by wide facilities for students, shops and offices.
Lastly
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, there is a new building on the shop site
before
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apply
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for students' apartments.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, whereas".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words campus, side, right, lake with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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