The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007

The maps provide key information about a coastal town, named Petland, from 1950 to 2007.
Overall
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, it is clear from the older plan that the town had few services.
In addition
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, it was not divided into specific facilities,
whereas
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the map in 2007
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was modern, clearer and had multiple spaces.
According to
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what is shown, there was a sea in the north direction. If you come from the north side, there was an industrial area on the right side,
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on the left side, there was a car
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and grassland. In terms of the plan in 2007, there were changes a several services. The sea was replaced by a yacht marina, and there was a small
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on the right. On the left
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, three apartments and shops were added.
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,
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the new
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, there was a swimming pool and a car
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.
At the end
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of the right road, a cinema was built.
Furthermore
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, the grassland was replaced by houses.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • coast
  • beach
  • town
  • harbor
  • road
  • house
  • houses
  • shop
  • shops
  • park
  • field
  • farm
  • water
  • map
  • year
  • grow
  • build
  • built
  • change
  • expand
  • develop
  • replace
  • new
  • old
  • more
  • less
  • along
  • near
  • center
  • edge
  • fishing
  • tourists
  • people
  • area
  • land
  • sea
  • bay
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