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The map show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The map provides key information about the present layout of an
office
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 building and plans for redevelopment in the future.
Overall
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, it is clear from the present plan that the
office
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 has few services.
In addition
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, it is not divided into specific facilities,
whereas
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 the plan in the future, clearer and have multiple spaces.
According to
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 what is shown now, there are WCs and a storeroom in front of the entrance. On the
right
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side
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, there is a large space for grass. On the left
side
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 of the door, there are multiple offices beside each other. On the opposite
side
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, there was a canteen and a kitchen.
Also
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, there is grass in the
right
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 place on the building. In terms of the new plan, several changes will be made. The entrance will transfer to the centre of the building. On the
right
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side
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, a new
office
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 will be built near the door.
Also
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, there the
right
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 grass will be replaced by a meeting area with many services. The WCs will be moved to the
right
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 corner.
While
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 the storeroom remains stable in the same place. On the left
side
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, there will be an outdoor seating area with chairs.
Moreover
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, there is one
office
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 near the door.
Lastly
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, the canteen and kitchen will be changed to
office
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 desks.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, right, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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