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It will be better for society and individuals if driverless cars are widely used. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement？

It is argued that
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apply
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 widely using
driverless
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cars
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 will be beneficial for
community
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the community
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 and
people
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.I totally disagree with
statement
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the statement
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 and think it causes serious safety
problems
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 on
roads
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 and employment issues.
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, technology nowadays
develop
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develops
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 rapidly .We can see it everywhere. Several years
ago
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ago,
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 new
driverless
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cars
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 started to
use
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be used
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 on the
roads
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.
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 rapid technology advancements
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are occurring
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in all fields,
driverless
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cars
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 are not ideal yet and can
make
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cause
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 huge
problems
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 on the
roads
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.
Main
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The main
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 concern is road safety. Despite technology advancements
especially
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, especially
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 in
machine
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the machine
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 industry
totally
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, totally
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relies
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relying
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 on robot
cars
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 can be absurd .
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, it can not replace human
judgement
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judgment
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, quick reactions at all. It
first
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was first
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 designed to fix
problems
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 in road safety, give disabled
people
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the changes
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changes
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chance
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 to drive.
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 ,these
type
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types
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 of
cars
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 work with
internet
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the internet
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 and
totally
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are totally
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relied
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 on software programs. Which means it can easily fail or can be attacked by cyberattacks.
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, weather conditions and various unavoidable obstacles can be huge
problems
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while
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 driving.
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,
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this
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these
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 types of
cars
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designed
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are designed
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 to follow strict road rules.
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,on the
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roads
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roads,
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drivers
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 can face various other
type
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types
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obstacles
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of obstacles
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 which can be difficult
control
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to control
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 or react as quickly as experienced
drivers
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.
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,
driverless
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cars
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 can cause
a
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apply
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significant social
problems
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such
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, such
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 as employment.
People
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 all over the world work as taxi
drivers
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 and many other vehicle
drivers
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. Using
driverless
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cars
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 widely can cause employment and social protests
which
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, which
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 bring more
problems
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 than
solution
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solutions
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.
Majority
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The majority
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workers
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of workers
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 earn money as
drivers
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, to
keep
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keeps
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 them away from
this
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work
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work,
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make
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making
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 their living even worse.
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,
majority
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the majority
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people
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of people
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 who have to migrate to
another
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other
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 countries are taxi
drivers
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. In conclusion, despite some positive features of
driverless
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cars
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,it seems
bring
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to bring
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huge
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more
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problems
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 than
solution
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solutions
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. Authorities should take all negative factors and implement
it
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them
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 in
balanced
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a balanced
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 way.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep it in focus.
coherence
Use one main idea per paragraph with a short topic sentence to guide the reader.
supporting points
Add more facts or details to back each point.
language
Work on grammar and sentence form to make meaning easy.
clarity of position
You show a clear view that driverless cars are not all good.
structure
You use linking words to show order (firstly, secondly, in conclusion).
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