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The graph below shows the number of immigrants to three countries from 1990 to 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph depicts the immigration
inflow
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 in
The
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the
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 United
states
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States
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 of America,
Canada
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 and
Australia
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 between the
years
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 1991 and 2001, in thousands.
Overall
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,
The
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the
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 United
states
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States
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 of America had a fluctuating trend but remained
to be
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the country with
most
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the most
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immigrants
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,
whereas
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,
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apply
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Australia
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recieved
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received
 the least number of
immigrants
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 and mirrored
Canadian
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the Canadian
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 trend of immigration, except slight fluctuation in mid-decade and
increase
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an increase
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 in the
year
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 2001. The United
states
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States
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 of America had a strong
inflow
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 of about 1420
thousand
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 people in the
year
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 1991, which
further
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 increased to 1800
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 in the next
year
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. There was a dramatic drop of 800
less
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fewer
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 people entering the country between 1992
to1993
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and 1993
.
In
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 the start of the
year
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1993
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1993,
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 1000
immigrants
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 were recorded, which
then
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 dramatically decreased in the following three
years
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 to 780 in
the
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1996.
Subsequently
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, there
was
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 fluctuating numbers of
inflow
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 noted in the next
years
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,
thus
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 reaching 900
thousand
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imigration
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immigration
 load by the end of the decade in 2001.
On the other hand
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,
Canada
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 and
Australia
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starting
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, starting
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 with 120
thousand
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 and 200
thousand
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 entry crowd, respectively, in the
year
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 1991, mirrored each other in trend. There was
slight
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a slight
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 rise seen in
Canada
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accepting
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, accepting
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 100
thousand
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 more people
and
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, and
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slight
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a slight
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 decrease in
Australia
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 of about 100
thousand
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 less, which came back to the
inital
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initial
 population in the
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year
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years
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 1995 and 1996, respectively.
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This
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The
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 number of 120
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 in
Australia
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 remained stable until 1999,
where
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when
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 there was an increase of about 20
thousand
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immigrants
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,
then
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 it steadily increased
further
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 over the
years
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 to reach 160
thousand
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 by 2001.
Canada
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 had
stable
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a stable
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inflow
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 till 2000 of approximately 280
thousand
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which
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, which
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further
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 increased to about 440
thousand
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 by the
year
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 2001.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words inflow, canada, australia, years, immigrants, year, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immigration trends
  • significant increase/decrease
  • fluctuation
  • steadily
  • sharp spike/drop
  • over the given period
  • comparative analysis
  • growth pattern
  • immigrant numbers
  • variations
  • main features
  • highlighting
  • stark differences
  • overall trends
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