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The rise of social media has affected personal relationships and society. Do the advantages of using social media for communicating outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, some
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 think that overusing social
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 others believe it is beneficial.
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 essay will discuss both views and give my opinion. On the one hand, modern apps can be dangerous for relationships between
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. Direct connection with society is essential and helps to improve many skills
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 as critical thinking.
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, social
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 reduces gatherings with family and friends.
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, if there is no face-to-face contact,
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 the risk of emotional problems can increase. In
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 affects many countries negatively and can lead to stress-related illnesses.
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, some
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 think the opposite. Social
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 can be a good way to stay connected with family members, colleagues, and teachers. These devices provide applications that allow
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 to communicate anytime and anywhere.
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, in 2020, I communicated with my teacher on Microsoft Teams to discuss lessons related to the final exam.
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, it is difficult to choose which view is better. In my opinion, the advantages of using social
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 for communication outweigh the disadvantages.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a short view, then write 2 good points for and against, then a clear end.
content
Add more facts or events to back each point. Keep to one idea per paragraph.
coherence
Use linking words to show order and contrast. For example, 'First', 'But', 'Also', 'So'.
grammar
Keep the language simple. Use short sentences and correct verb forms.
content
Clear view on the topic with both sides shown.
example
Personal example shows you can use tech in class.
structure
Conclusion repeats your view well.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital communication
  • Online presence
  • Privacy concerns
  • Cyberbullying
  • Social networking sites
  • Virtual communities
  • Echo chambers
  • Digital footprint
  • Social media influencers
  • Content dissemination
  • User-generated content
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Cognitive dissonance
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