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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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 are experiencing
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 pleasant
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 span than humans in past times. I strongly believe that the lifestyle of the majority of
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 cannot be imagined without both substantial and tiny inventions
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 as cars or electronic devices, which are created in order to ease and decrease manual labour. More specific explanations can be read in the following paragraphs. Starting with, in
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human-beings
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 the peak of the development of technology and continuing to foster innovation. In reaching their current stage, the creation of subjects like math, physics, chemistry and science played an integral role, as they were main factors in the expenditure of human knowledge about farming, agriculture and health, which were the reason for the survival of
people
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 even in extremely dangerous periods like Middle Ages when deadly disease posed a serious threat to The modern humans are experiencing more pleasant and convenient
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 span than individuals in past their survival.
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 their knowledge of math and physics allowed them to discover and use electricity, followed by the invention of
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 electronic gadgets
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 as computers. The deep
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 of existing materials and knowledge
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 to the creation of computer languages, from which the apps, mobile phones and artificial intelligence were programmed.
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, AI is being developed
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 the manual labour of
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 fully, creating the most comfortable periods
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 it is planned to reach in a few decades.
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life
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today
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 heaven for the previous inhabitants of Earth, because of the inventions, developments and discoveries that could not be reached in
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 times. With the most convenient devices and pleasing environments, the
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life
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quality of
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 living
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 is much better.

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structure
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language
Use simple sentences and clear words. Put one idea in each paragraph. Check grammar and verb form.
content
The essay shows a real attempt to answer the question.
content
There is some talk of technology and its effect on life.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Healthcare improvements
  • Economic growth
  • Social changes
  • Global connectivity
  • Standard of living
  • Life expectancy
  • Gender equality
  • Legal rights
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Access to information
  • Environmental concerns
  • Sustainable development
  • Stress levels
  • Quality of life
  • Medical progress
  • Job opportunities
  • Income disparity
  • Life satisfaction
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