The pie charts below show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.

The pie charts illustrate the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults between 1985 and 1995.

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, in the

beginning

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the smallest is the other activities,

while

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the largest segment is watching TV.

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the end of

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period

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the biggest activity is watching TV, during

lowest

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the lowest

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activity is the other activity.

The watching

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Watching

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TV in 1985 was 32% and dropped to 30% in 1995. The other activities had 6% in

1985

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then

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went down to 2% in 1995. Eating out experienced 23% in 1985 and decreased to 8% in 1995. Talking with Family showed 18% and dropped to 7% in 1995.

The talking

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with friends showed 21% in

1985

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1985,

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then

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went up to 26% in 1995.

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playing computer games showed up and got 27% in 1995.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

134 words

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