IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Try for free →
The bar chart gives information about how many accommodations were built in each
year
Use synonyms
 from 2000 to 2009 in two cities,
Derby
Use synonyms
 and
Nottingham
Use synonyms
.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 the
year
Use synonyms
 09 had the highest number of houses;
also
Linking Words
, we can see that more cabins were constructed in
Derby
Use synonyms
 than in the other
place
Fix the agreement mistake
places
show examples
.
According to
Linking Words
 the data shown, in the beginning, both percentages were under 50%, but
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 in the second
year
Use synonyms
,
Nottingham
Use synonyms
 had developed and improved
about
Change preposition
to about
show examples
 60%.
In contrast
Linking Words
, the rate dropped to almost 15% in the following
year
Use synonyms
, and it rose to
near
Rephrase
nearly
show examples
 60% for
Derby
Use synonyms
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, people who lived in
Nottingham
Use synonyms
 in 2007 owned about 180% of properties;
however
Linking Words
, it was different in 2008.
Derby
Use synonyms
 individuals reached a proportion close to 300%, and
Nottingham
Use synonyms
 decreased to around 5%, unfortunately.
Last
Linking Words
year
Use synonyms
, the
Derby
Use synonyms
 rate of
lands
Fix the agreement mistake
land
show examples
 approached almost 350%, and surprisingly,
Nottingham
Use synonyms
 managed to increase to 250%.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words year, derby, nottingham with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • bar
  • year
  • years
  • period
  • city
  • Derby
  • Nottingham
  • number
  • houses
  • built
  • go up
  • rise
  • go down
  • fall
  • higher
  • lower
  • more
  • less
  • same
  • different
  • overall
  • generally
  • in general
  • in contrast
  • whereas
  • while
  • during
  • from
  • to
  • between
  • the chart shows
  • it shows
  • notable
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • comparison
  • data
  • report
  • paragraph
  • sentence
  • linking words
What to do next:
Look at other essays: