The pie charts below show the percentage of students on the one adult education centre taking a various course offered in 1985 and this year.

The two pie charts compare the percentage of
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attending different courses at an adult education centre in 1985 and
this
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year.
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,
it is clear that
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the popularity of some subjects changed noticeably over the period.
While
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interest in modern languages and art declined, subjects
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as IT and cookery attracted more
students
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by
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year. In 1985, modern languages were the most popular course, chosen by 24% of
students
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. Art and fitness/dance were
also
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common choices at 17% and 22% respectively. Local history accounted for 15%,
while
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cookery and music appreciation saw relatively small shares at 14% and 8%.
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,
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year
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largest proportion of
students
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enrolled in IT, making up 27%. Fitness and dance remained at 22%, the same as in 1985. Cookery experienced a noticeable rise from 14% to 19%.
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, the percentage of
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studying modern languages dropped significantly to 17%, and art declined slightly to 15%.
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, the data suggests a shift in learners’ interests over time, with practical subjects becoming more popular in recent years.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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