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The bar chart below shows the number of tourists in three nations who trave/ to Australia in 2005 and 2015. The graph below shows the numberof tourists who use two types for holiday. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.

The bar graph and the line chart illustrate the
figure
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number
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 of
visitors
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 in the US,UK and Japan who came to Australia in 2005 and 2015 and
enjoy
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enjoyed
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on
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apply
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two
type
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types
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 of vacations.
According to
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 the graph, the majority of
Japan
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Japanese
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 tourists showed
ab up word
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a upward
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 trend in the first year.
whereas
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, the total
of
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number of
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visitors
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enjoy on
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enjoying
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 backpacking had a marginal growth over time. By observing the chart, it can be seen that in 2005 UK had 800,000
visitors
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travelled
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travel
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 to
Australia
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Australia,
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also
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 it showed in
2015
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2015,
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 over 1,400,000 tourists. Whilst
,
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apply
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 the number of residents from
United
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the United
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state
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States
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 was less than 600,000 and nearly 1,600,000.
However
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, Japanese sum witnessed a gradual decline to 1,000,000 travelled.
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, backpacking
noticeable decrease
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noticeably decreased
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at the first stage
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just
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, just
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 below 500,000
which
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, which
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 gradually grew to more than 1,000,000 tourists in comparison with people who
staying
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stayed
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 at the resort
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, lees
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lees
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less
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 than 2,000,000 in 2005.
the
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The
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 number of
visitors
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 almost reached the peak at 2,500,000 in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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