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Your friend is celebrating her Birthday soon and has invited you to a party. But you are unable to come because you are going to attend an important meeting that day. Write a letter to your friend and thank her for the invitation; explain why you cannot come; propose to meet on other day;

Dear Rebecca, I received the invitation
of
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for
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 your birthday for
upcoming
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next
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 Monday at
Ritz
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the Ritz
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 Carlton. I truly thank you for that, but unfortunately, I will not be able to attend. You know that I am preparing for the military exams
and
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 on that day
I
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will be meeting my coach
who
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 is training me for it. That particular day will be very important for me as he will be conducting my mock interview.
Although
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 I am already prepared for the actual exam, I believe that
this
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 practice session will give me a better view
on
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 my preparation level. I truly want to be present for your special day, but for
me
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 my work will always be my first priority. I promise you that I will make up for it by meeting you personally
on
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next Friday. We can meet at the Rosy Cafe at 4 PM and
also
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,
I
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and I
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have a special gift for you. I wish that you truly enjoy your birthday and
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 you in advance. Regards, Harnish

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grammar
Use simple, exact phrases. For example, say 'Thank you for inviting me to your birthday' instead of 'I received the invitation of your birthday'.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like and, but to help flow.
structure
Try to have one main idea in each paragraph; the second paragraph has several ideas.
clarity
Make the date clear. Use 'next Monday' or give a date.
tone
Keep a warm, polite tone and close with kind wishes.
content
Your thanks and reason are clear.
planning
You propose to meet on another day with place and time.
tone
The letter keeps a friendly and respectful tone.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • thanks, thank you, grateful, invited, invitation, birthday, party, celebrate
  • sorry, I’m sorry, I can’t come, I cannot attend, I cannot make it
  • unfortunately, due to, because of, clash with
  • meeting, work, appointment, important, cannot miss
  • propose, suggest, could we meet, would you like to meet
  • date, day, time, when, next week, weekend, after
  • catch up, have a chat, coffee, meal
  • look forward to, hope, wish you well, best wishes
  • please let me know, let me know what day works
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