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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

There is an ongoing concern about whether international
companies
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 are becoming popular around the world.
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 these developments offer several advantages to the local communities,
it
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also
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presents
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 some drawbacks related to the environment.
This
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 essay will explore both the advantages and disadvantages of
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 establishment. On the one hand,
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 the multinational
companies
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, local
people
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 can get more job opportunities.
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, it improves the economic condition for the residents.
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, a recent survey conducted in India regarding
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tacos
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 company, 87%
people
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 were more interested in
this
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 company because it provides them with work, even though citizens have low skills.
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, many families completed their basic needs,
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 as studying for their children, groceries, and clothing.
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, multinational corporations bring advanced technology that can scale up with the local sector.
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, these
companies
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 were giving training programs to those who are not educated.
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, the growing number of large
companies
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 can lead to the exploitation of the local resources. Many factories were established near the residential areas, where
people
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 farm on their land,
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was
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badly
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 impact on their water and minerals.
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, many Indonesian
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 living
on
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mountains
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area
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they
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experienced
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 some diseases because they do not have access to clean water. Factories had water pollution, and noise pollution spread over there. Basically, it is affecting individuals' living style, health, and environment. In conclusion,
it is clear that
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 multinational operators' national
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boost
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 their financial system.
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, the negative impacts on human life and the environment
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could not
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 be overlooked. The government should discuss with international
companies
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for
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about
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 work-balanced local
people
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,
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 and their lifestyle.

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task
Make your plan clear at the start. Say your view in one line near the end of the first paragraph.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a topic sentence and add a small example.
coherence
Use simple links like and, but, also to join ideas. Try to keep ideas in a straight line.
language
Check small errors in grammar and spell so the rate of sense is high.
content
You try to show both sides of the topic.
structure
There is a close ending that restates the idea.
content
The essay has some real facts or points to a view.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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