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The line chart shows exports in billions of dollars

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The line chart gives information about
exporting
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the export
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 rate from Australia to four nations, namely Japan,
US
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the US
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, China, and India, between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, the percentage of China and India showed an upward trend
while
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 others had a slow
decreased
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decrease
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 over time. China
with
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, with
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 the most significant changes on the graph,
it
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apply
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started at around 3% in 1990 and gradually rose by 3% just ten years later
before
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, before
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had
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having
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 a major
inreased
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increase
 to roughly 26% in 2010,
then
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 it kept on rising and
reach
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reached
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 the peak point at nearly 30% in 2012.
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, India
also
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 had a growth on its stream, it began at approximately 1% and remained stable
untill
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until
 2000, it marginally grew to about 8% in 2010 and dropped by around 3%
in
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at
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 the end of the period.
On the contrary
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, Japan initiated a large percentage at over 23% in
early
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the early
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year
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years
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 and dipped to 20% in 1995
,
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.
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This
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 figure continuously
fall
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fell
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 to roughly 17% by the end.
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, the export percentage to
US
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the US
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 began at above 10%,
then
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 it decreased to below 9% before it rebounded to 11% in the year 2000. The rate
mantainly dropped
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maintained
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 and reached the lowest number at approximately 5% in 2010,
then
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 it grew back to nearly 8% in 2012.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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