The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The par chart provides key information about expenditures for five huge categories in four countries in 2009. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that housing is the most significant thing in all countries.
In addition
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, housing and food are above the others,
whereas
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health care and clothing are below them.
According to
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what is shown, housing and food are both above 12% in each country. Only the United States have passed the 25% in all categories,
while
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others are less than that.
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Japan have been higher than 20% in food
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Kingdom is exactly 20%,
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Canada and
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States are less than 15%. In terms of health care and clothing, all countries are below 8%. The lowest country in
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health care is
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Kingdom around 3%.
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, the lowest country in
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United States about 4 %.

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