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The chart below shows the price in euros of 800 grams of four types of bread in one European country from 2001 to 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the price in euros of 800 grams of four types of bread in one European country from 2001 to 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 (
euros
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 per 800
grams
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) of four types of
bread
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 in a European nation over the period between 2001 and 2006.
Overall
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, the
price
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 of brown, white, and rye
bread
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 experienced an upward trend,
whereas
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 wholegrain
bread
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 was characterised by a major fluctuation pattern. At the beginning, the three types of
bread
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, namely brown, white, and rye, began at the same
price
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,which was 0.6
euros
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 per 800
grams
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.
Furthermore
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, the
price
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 of rye decreased to approximately 0.5
euros
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 in the following year. After the share recovered to 0.6
euros
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, it remained unchanged until 2004.
This
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 figure increased marginally to around 0.7
euros
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at the end
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 of the period.
Moreover
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, the
price
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 of white
bread
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 soared to 1 euro per 800
grams
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 in 2002, which was followed by a consistent growth and reached a peak of 1.3
euros
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 by 2005.
In addition
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, the revenue of brown
bread
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 jumped to 1.5
euros
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 in 2002, which marked a significant rise. Before falling moderately to 1.4
euros
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, the rate edged up to 1.6
euros
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 in 2003.
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, the
price
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 rebounded to 1.6
euros
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 per 800
grams
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 in 2005.
In contrast
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, the revenue of wholegrain
bread
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 accounted for 0.8
euros
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 in 2001.
This
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 was followed by a dramatic build to 1.8
euros
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 in 2002. The revenue crashed to 1 euro per 800
grams
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 in 2003, and
thereafter
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 dipped moderately to below 0.8
euros
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 just a year later.
This
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price
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 inched up to 0.8
euros
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 in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words euros, grams, bread, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.
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