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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts illustrate information about the ages of the
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 of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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, it can be clearly seen that the 15–59
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 accounts for the highest percentages in both countries,
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 the 60+
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 records the lowest figures. There are
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 noticeable differences between Yemen and Italy. Looking at the charts, it can be seen that the 0–14
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 had the highest percentage in Yemen in 2000. By 2050, the 15–59
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 is expected to become the largest. It accounted for 50.1% in 2000,
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this
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 figure is projected to be 46.3% in 2050. Regarding Italy, the greatest figure was reported in
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-59
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 at 61.6% in 2000. By 2050, the 15-59
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 is expected to become the highest. The second largest values came in
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age
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 groups at 24.1%.
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, the lowest proportion belonged to
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-14
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 at 14.3% . It can be increased in 2025.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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