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Band 2

Every year languages die. Some people think that it is earsier to people if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Every year
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languages
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 die. Some
people
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 think it is easier for
people
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 if there are fewer
languages
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 in the world. I agree a little with
this
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 idea. If there are fewer
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,
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 can talk
easy
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.
People
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 from different countries can understand each other.
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, when
people
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 travel, they can speak one
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 and
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 problem.
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Also
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 work and study can be easier. But
languages
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 are important.
Language
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 is culture. When
language
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die
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dies
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, culture
die
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dies
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 too.
People
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 lose their history. Many
people
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 like their own
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 and do not want to lose it. In conclusion, fewer
languages
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 can be easier for
people
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, but losing
languages
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 is not good. So I partly agree.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first line of the intro. Then add 2 or 3 simple reasons and a short example for each. End with a clear conclusion that restates your view.
coherence cohesion
Use clear paragraphs. Start each paragraph with a simple topic sentence. Use linking words such as but, and, for example, also, therefore to show how ideas connect.
task response
A clear main view is given: partly agree.
coherence cohesion
There is a simple example to show how language helps travel.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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