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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In many cities around the world, people
could
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 obtain any kind of
food
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 produced in diverse countries. From my perspective, I firmly believe that
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 is a harmful development for local
farmers
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'
products
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 and the
quality
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 of
food
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. One main reason is that numerous consumers might not buy local
products
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 because there is a variety of the same
food
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 in the supermarket. To illustrate, some adults tend to buy
food
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 produced in Asian countries because it seems cheaper than local
products
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.
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, more
farmers
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 face difficulty paying for their
food
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 and find the competition very demanding.
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,
farmers
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 who produce apples in developing areas observe a reduction in their prices so that they can increase their sales, but
with
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 a smaller
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. There is controversy
from
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farmers
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 over whether the
food
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 has arrived with the same
quality
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 or not.
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, they argue that
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 produced all over the world is not edible. To clarify, some global
food
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 may be mixed chemically to travel long distances.
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, a lot of
farmers
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 believe that
food
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 could be cheaper, but not rich in
quality
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.
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, young generations like children and teenagers get health issues after they eat some global
food
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.
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, many
farmers
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 say that local
products
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 are more safely produced with vivid
colors
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 rather than non-native
food
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. In conclusion,
although
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food
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 produced all over the world seems inexpensive, local
food
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 is safer and supports our
farmers
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. They can make sure that all
food
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 arrives in the supermarket with the same
quality
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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