The graph gives information about male and female gym memberships between 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates gym
memberships
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for men and
female
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women
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from 1980 until 2010. In general, it is clearly seen that men experienced a downward trend, but females showed a slight increase. A few striking features are
also
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seen. In more detail, units for
mens
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men's
memberships
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doubled from around 2000 in 1980 to just below 4000 in 1985.
At
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the year
1995
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1995,
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a dip was seen
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at approximately 1800
memberships
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for guys.
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graph
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the graph
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skirocketed
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skyrocketed
to 5000 units and
hitting
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a peak in 2005,
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plummeted to an even lower unit
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around 800.
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,
girls
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girls'
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memberships
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started at just above 1000 in 1980 and fluctuated until 1995 when it reached its highest point
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of
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around 2900
memberships
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.
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the fluctuation continued until 2010 at 1900 units.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words memberships with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • pronounced difference
  • converge
  • diverge
  • membership rate
  • significant growth
  • slump
  • dominant trend
  • predominantly
  • consistent pattern
  • noteworthy
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