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The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001

The bar chart illustrates how
much
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many
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hours
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spent
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were spent
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 by each
teacher
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 in teaching in four different countries
namely
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, namely
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, Japan, Spain,
Lceland
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Iceland
, and the
USA
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in
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, in
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 the year 2001.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
USA
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 showed the highest number of
hours
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 among all three countries. Notably, the upper secondary
teacher
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 spent most of
time
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the time
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 in teaching,
while
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primary
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the primary
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teacher
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 experienced the lowest
hours
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. The upper secondary
teacher
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 experienced the largest time in teaching among all four areas.
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, the
USA
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 accounted for nearly 1200
hours
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,
while
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 both Spain and
Lceland
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Iceland
 share
relatively
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a relatively
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 similar
amount
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apply
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number of
hours
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about
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, about
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 900
hours
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. In comparison, Japan had the smallest
hours
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. As for lower secondary
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teacher
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teachers
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, the United States recorded 100
hours
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, which made the highest point compared to other nations.
Whereas
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,
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apply
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 Lecland witnessed only 600
hours
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. Primary
teacher
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,
on the other hand
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,
it
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apply
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had the smallest figure among all countries. The highest number accounted for the
USA
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, reaching
at
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700
hours
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, followed
Spain
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by Spain
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 with approximately 650
hours
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 and in both Japan and
Lecland
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the Lecland
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 areas
roughly
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, roughly
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 600
hours
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, teacher, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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