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The bar charts below show precipitation in hot desert climate grasslands in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts compare monthly
precipitation
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 levels in hot desert grasslands in 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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rainfall
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 was substantially higher in 1980 than in 2000 throughout the year.
In addition
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,
precipitation
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 in 1980 showed marked seasonal variation,
whereas
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 figures for 2000 were consistently low with only minor fluctuations. In 1980, monthly
rainfall
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 generally ranged between about 160
mm
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 and 330
mm
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.
Precipitation
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 increased from January (approximately 260
mm
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) to a peak in March, when it reached around 330
mm
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, before gradually declining towards midsummer. The lowest level was recorded in July, at roughly 160
mm
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.
After
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this
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 point,
rainfall
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 rose again from August onwards, ending the year at about 260–270
mm
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 in December.
By contrast
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,
rainfall
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 in 2000 was dramatically lower. Monthly
precipitation
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 mostly remained between 40
mm
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 and 55
mm
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. The highest figures, at around 53
mm
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, were recorded in June, July and October,
while
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 the driest month was February, with only about 40
mm
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 of
rainfall
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. Unlike 1980, there was no clear seasonal pattern.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words precipitation, rainfall, mm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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