the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

This
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map depicts two likely places for a new supermarket in Galsdon city. It is clear from the map that the first
site
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is located in the countryside,
while
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the second
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is at the
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of Galsdon
town
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According to
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what is shown, the first location is in the
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and surrounded by an industrial area, and the railway path is in front.
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, the first
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is located at the eastern side of Bransdon city, about 16 km away, and west of Cransdon
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, about 25 Km away, which have 15000 and 29000 residents respectively.
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, the second location is in the countryside and near Hindon
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, about 12 km away, and both housing and industrial areas are eastern and south of it.
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, the main roads and railway are across the second
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To sum up
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, we could say that both possible supermarkets are in Galsdon
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, which serves 65000 people
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additionally
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, both are in the no traffic zone and east of Hindon
town
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words site, town with synonyms.
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