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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

People
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 tend to think being in a
city
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 has plenty of
priviliges
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privileges
,
although
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 they do not consider
good
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the good
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opportunites
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opportunities
 they could find outside
the
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a
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 place boiling with action and
people
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. Most of the citizens have
troubles
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trouble
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with
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apply
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getting
into
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to
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 their destination. Transportation routes that
has
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have
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 been established
throught
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throughout
 the
city
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,
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apply
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experiences
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experience
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 a big flow of
people
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especially
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, especially
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 in peak hours of the
day
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day,
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where
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when
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people
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 tend to act
wildy
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wildly
 to get
their
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to their
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 workplace, studies and places they need to be on time.
This
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notrious
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notorious
 act has a lot of bad implications on
overall
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city
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life
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. One of the awful things we get from
the
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city
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life
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 is a constant exposure to
high pitched
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high-pitched
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 noises and polluted air with various complex toxins we inhale.
This
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lead
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leads
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 not only to
phisycal
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physical
 damage but
also
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 affects mentally, where
city
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life
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 can drain one's patience, tolerance, and
overall
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 mental state by
contantly
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constantly
 being in touch with negativity that occurs in the space around. Everyone deserves a decent environment with a good quality of
life
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.
That is
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 why
,
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 governments have to put all their force not only to empower the
city
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structues
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structures
 but
also
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make
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to make
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people
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 want to live in
a
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the
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 countryside where
opportunites
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opportunities
 that
city
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life
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 lacks could be established
here
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.
Firstly
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, offering new workplaces, unemployed
people
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finally would
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would finally
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 have a job
and
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, and
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 they
will
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would
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 be
the
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part of urban residents who
contributes
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contribute
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positely
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positively
 to
the
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apply
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urban
life
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, like working as an
agriculturian
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agricultural
, where
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worker, where
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 good money and opportunities could be
achived
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achieved
 considering good conditions for
this
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 purpose.
Secondly
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, opening new facilities that are in
urge
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urgent
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 need,
such
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 as hospitals, supermarkets, pharmacies, and entertainment.
Finally
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, establishing
good
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a good
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 connection with
city
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life
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 via roads that help
people
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to
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apply
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get to their destination easily. In conclusion, if governments
will
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make urban places
much
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more
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 convenient for
life
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, they would even reduce cities from overpopulation, as residents will find it suitable to live in a clean, quiet place and
thus
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reducing
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reduce
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 pressure on the
city
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.

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structure
Your answer has some good ideas but needs a clear plan. Make a short intro, 2 or 3 body parts, and a short ending.
content
Keep one idea per paragraph. Each paragraph should give a clear point and a small example.
linking
Use simple link words like and, but, also, for example to join ideas.
scope
Choose points that relate to the task. Avoid talking about countryside unless it helps the task.
accuracy
Check spelling of common words and use simple word choices.
content
Talks about real problems in city life.
idea
Gives ideas on how the government could help.
structure
Has a closing line that restates the task.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Metropolis
  • Rapid urban growth
  • Megacity
  • Urban sprawl
  • Housing affordability
  • Infrastructure development
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Green spaces
  • Job market
  • Social cohesion
  • Community engagement
  • Safety measures
  • Crime prevention
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