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The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The shown pie charts illustrate the main
reason
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reasons
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 tourists
traveled
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travelled
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 to Orange City in 2006 and 2016.
Overall
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, it is apparent that in 2016 the most important reason for visitors
were
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was
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 restaurants.
Whereas
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, annual events played the most crucial role in attracting visitors in 2006. 
By contrast
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, the population of dining in 2016 shows a huge
inscrease
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increase
 compared to
2006
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2006,
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 where the popularity is at 10.0%.
Furthermore
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,
theaters
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theatres
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 experienced a mild reduction in 2016 to 8.0%. As can be seen, there was a dramatic drop in the
visit
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number
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 of
museums
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museum
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in
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visits in
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 2016, leaving it at 11.0%.
Moreover
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, both in 2006 and 2016, there
was
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were
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 approximately 5.0 to 8.0
percentages
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per cent
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 for other activities.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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