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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.

The provided line chart compares the proportions of exports from Australia to Japan,
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, China and India between 1990 and 2012.
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while
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 China and India grew noticeably, Japan and
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 dropped gradually. Observing the chart in detail,
initially
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, India depicted the smallest rate among other groups, representing around 1%. Even though it increased steadily, it remained the figure which showed the lowest share.
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, China started with around 2% and
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, it ascended significantly, surpassing all three countries and becoming the dominant
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 Meanwhile, its share made up 30 % in the final year. Focusing on the indications of
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, beginning with over 10%,it fell drastically until 1995,accounting for 9%.
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 it recovered in 2000, it decreased slowly by 2012,constituting 8%. In terms of Japan, Japanese people imported the biggest part of Australian exports in 1990,representing 25%.Yet it went down with some fluctuations and accounted for almost 20%.

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