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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.Summarize the formation byselectingand reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the
production
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 levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. There are
tree
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three
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 kinds of main fuel in
UK
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the UK
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. Namely, Petroleum, coal, and natural gas. As we can see in the graph, in the
firts
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first
period
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 (1981)
in
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, in
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production
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 of natural gas
it's
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was
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 only
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production
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apply
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below
than
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apply
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40.
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However
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However,
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in
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at
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 the end of
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period
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the period
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,
wich
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which
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 is in 2000.
Production
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 of gas
increase
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increases
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 significantly to 100.
On the other hand
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,
Poduction
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Production
 of petroleum in 1981
start
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started
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 in more than 80. Between 1981 and 1986, the
production
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 of petroleum
growth
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grew
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 to 140.
Linking Words
However
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However,
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their
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there
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have
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has
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 increase in their
production
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, between 1986 and 1991 their
pruduction
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production
decrease
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decreased
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 dramatically
into
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to
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 100.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
,
in
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at
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 the end of
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period
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the period
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, their
production
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growing up
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grew
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 again,
into
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to
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 140. Different from the others,
production
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 of coal in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
start
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started
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 in 80.
While
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 they start in a good amount of
production
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, in between 1981 and 1986 their
production
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have
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has
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fall
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fallen
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siginificantly
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significantly
into
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to
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 under
than
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apply
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40. And their
production
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have
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has
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 a
masive
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massive
growing
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growth
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 in 1986
into
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to
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 60, but in the rest of
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period
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the period
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 their
production
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 only
decrease
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decreases
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 and
stop
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stops
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in
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at
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 under 40.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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