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Band 4

The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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 is good and bad think at the same , because social
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 it help to much in many things like when someone want to study or do some research , in social
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 can find an teacher do some video about the subject of the research,
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 it help when someone need to learn new language he can contact a teacher from social
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 who are famous about the think that he do , social
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 it's good for person who have new project and he need people to know it , it's a good idea to do an advertisement or promot a video
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 i will give an example like i know a famous women i send her message and i send the product to her to do for me an advertisement (Ad) because she have on instagram or tiktok more than 100000 of peolpe follow her,
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 she is living in the same town , so now social
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 it help me to growth my project and much of people they know the project after the Ad , and i paid the famous person for
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 Ad and she is making benefit for me and for her . I was talking about a good
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more than 3 hours without doing
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structure
Plan your essay with a clear start, main part and end.
task management
Say your view in the first paragraph and keep to it in the rest.
cohesion
Link ideas with small words like and, but, also, then to show flow.
content
Give more full facts or proof for each idea.
language
Check spelling and grammar to make it clear.
content
You try to cover both good and bad sides.
content
You give an example with a real case (the ad).
structure
You show a view that social media can be used well.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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