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Some people belive that children should start school at a very early age, while others think they should begin later. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Generally,
children
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schools
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approximetaly
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approximately
 at the
age
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 of
five
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 early for
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other
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the
age
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five
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age
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On the one hand,some
people
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age
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five
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early
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 for
children
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. Because
children
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their
 parents and sleep.
sleep
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 and family
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 more important than
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other
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Children
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 should play in the park and go outside
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five
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age
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Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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according to
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people
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five
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age
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age
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other subjects early and prepare for primary school. School and subject
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 really important for
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children
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 have a lot of
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so
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Conclusion
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, some
people
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 agree with the first idea
but
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idea
 because in my
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it is
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structure
Plan a short intro that states the two views and your own view in one line.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Begin each with a small topic sentence.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas, such as also, but, however, for example.
language
Check grammar and spell most words right. Use the correct form 'the age of five', 'early', 'late'.
content
Give a real example or two to show the view, like time with family or work in school.
content
The essay shows two sides and a clear view at the end.
structure
There is a basic plan and attempt to compare.
language
The student tries to use connectors and order ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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