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Band 2.5

The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles.

Through the
picture
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picture,
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 we will see that
this
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 picture is about how we
cycle
Verb problem
recycle
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 the
glass
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bottles
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.
First
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First,
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 we will go to collect the wasted
glass
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bottles
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 from the collection point that people usually drop
.
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off.
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 After collecting the
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bottles
Punctuation problem
bottles,
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 we will use high-pressure water and
then
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 separate them into 3 categories by
colours
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colour
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,
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:
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in
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apply
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brown
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brown,
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 green and clear. After separating the
colour
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colour,
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 we will send it to a
glass
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 factory to
destroy
Verb problem
break
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 it into pieces to make it smaller and more easily to melt.
Then
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 we will burn a piece of
glass
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 in a furnace for 600 - 800
degree
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degrees
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celsius
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Celsius
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, after it melts into
liquid
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liquid,
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 we will shape it by pouring it
in
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into
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 the
glass
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 mould and
also
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 mixing with the new liquid
glass
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 because only the recycled liquid
glass
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 isn’t enough for the tons of new
glass
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bottles
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. After we put the liquid
glass
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 in the
mould
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mould,
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 we need to wait for the liquid to set up into
solid
Correct article usage
a solid
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, and
then
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 we will put our products inside
and
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, and
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 it will be ready for sale through the
super market
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supermarket
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. So if we don’t want to let the earth have more global warming, please help us by recycling things that can be used more than once and send
it
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them
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 to
where
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places where
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we
Correct pronoun usage
they
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 can collect it for recycling.
evalute
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Evaluate
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task response
Improve task response by adding a clear start idea and a short end summary. Stick to describing the process in order.
structure
lexical grammatical
Use correct words for actions. Say melt instead of burn. Keep to simple facts and avoid extra details.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling. Use simple, short sentences to avoid run-ons.
structure
Keep the order of steps clear and consistent. Each sentence should link to the next with a small link word.
content
The essay shows a clear sequence from collection to sale.
content
Some specific details are included, such as colors and the idea of melting and moulding.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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