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People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter, describe the problems explain how it is affecting people say what the company should do to help

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my concern regarding the poor connection of your server.
Due to
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which
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this
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, all citizens of my area are facing
myriad
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a myriad
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 of problems. The first and foremost is, school children have their exams next month. As you know, after the pandemic,
mostly
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most
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 students do
self study
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self-study
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 with mobile phones.
While
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,
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apply
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 in these days, they are unable to use search engines
,
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apply
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 in their studies.
Secondly
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, many individuals live abroad and
from
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for
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 several days they
are
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do
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 not
having
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have
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 communication with their family members.
Apart from
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this
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, many people are
technophile
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, and having no networking through social media applications, they are becoming depressed.
Nevertheless
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, it is a
seroius
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serious
 issue, and something should be done to address
this
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. Towers have become outdated, and they need repair.
Besides
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this
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, an
increment
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increase
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of
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in
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 users
have
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has been
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 seen in your telecom company
,
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therefore
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, new lines should be introduced. I kindly request you to look into the matter as
priority
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a priority
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,
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 and take immediate steps to resolve the issue permanently. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours sincerely, Ramandeep Kaur.

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grammar
Use short, clear sentences. Fix small errors like 'seroius' to 'serious' and avoid big words.
organization
Group one idea in each paragraph. Start with the problem, then how it affects people, then the fix or ask.
content
Explain clearly how the issue hits people, with one or two simple examples.
vocabulary
Use easy words. Try to avoid words that are not common, such as 'myriad', 'technophile', or 'increment'.
tone
Keep a polite and formal tone all through the letter.
format
Follow a good format: Dear Sir/Madam, body, Yours sincerely, Name.
structure
Greeting and closing are present.
tone
Tone is formal and polite.
content
The letter asks for action from the company.
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