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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons

The given bar chart illustrates the data on scores of three different teams from 2002 to 2005.
Overall
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,
although
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 the highest scores were received by
team
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B
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,
this
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 figure decreased over the period for
this
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 group. At the beginning of the period,
team
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B
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 began with 82 points,
while
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 groups A and C had very few points, 5 and 10, respectively. Surprisingly,
although
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team
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B
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 continued to decrease between 2003 and 2004 to reach 43, an opposite trend was seen for group A, and it received 35. After a year, there was a decline in the scores of teams A and C, 8 and 5, respectively, which was a sharp reduction for
team
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 A.
In contrast
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, there was a moderate increase for
team
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B
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 to 55 points.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words team, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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