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The chart below illustrates the primary factors influencing students’ decisions to attend a particular university in the UK in the years 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The given bar chart shows the key points that
forceing
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force
 students to select
specific
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a specific
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 university in
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the unitd
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unitd kingdom
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United Kingdom
the
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for the
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 specific years 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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,
It
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it
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 can be seen
most
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that most
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student
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students
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 choose the
unviersity
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university
due to
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correct
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the correct
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 degree
programe
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program
 in both 1995 and
2005
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2005,
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while
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 they did not consider
about
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apply
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sport
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sports
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 and social
activites
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activities
 in 2005. In 1995, 35
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per cent
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 of children
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had
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 expected
suitable
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a suitable
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 degree for them
and
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, and
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 in 2005 it was increased
sightly
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slightly
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which
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, which
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 was around 37
precent
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per cent
.
in
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In
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 1995, 10
percent
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per cent
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 of students
wants to
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wanted
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 their parental home close to them
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however
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; however
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, in
2005
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2005,
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 it
was
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apply
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dramatically increased which was around 20
precent
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per cent
. In 2005, students
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neglected
 about sport and social
activites
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activities
and
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 it was around 5
percent
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per cent
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 and
lowest
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the lowest
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interst
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interest
 in 2005.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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