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The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart compares the numbers of three different animals (
seals
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,
whales
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, and
dolphins
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) recorded in the
Gormez
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Gomera
 Straits between 2006 and 2018.
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, it is evident that there were general upward trends
of
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 all three animals. Meanwhile,
seals
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 had the largest number
most
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 of the period. In 2006,
seals
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 ranked first at approximately 43
seals
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, before falling sharply to around 24
seals
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 in 2010.
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 number recovered to roughly 45 by the final year. As
for
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whales
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 stood at around 24
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whales
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in the first year, and
then
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 grew slightly to 25
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by 2010. Despite a slight fall in 2014, grew to nearly 30
whales
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 in 2018.
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, the figure of
dolphins
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 experienced
increase
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 consistently over the period. It
rise
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 from about 16
dolphins
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 in 2006 to over 20
dolphins
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 in 2010. It accounted for 33
dolphins
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 in 2014, reaching just over 50
dolphins
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 in 2018. It was overtaking the number of
seals
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seals, whales, dolphins with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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