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Nowadays, more people are choosing to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying in another country?

In
modern
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 era, many people prefer to
persuade
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pursue
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 their studies abroad, rather than
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apply
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 getting
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education
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an education
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 in
hometown
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their hometown
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.
This
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 situation brings certain drawbacks and benefits
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, which
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 will be discussed in
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 essay. Students
that
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who
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 prefer to foster their
education
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 in a
diffrent
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different
 location, rather than,
primitve
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primitive
 and
acquainted
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familiar
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 place like
home
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home,
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 are affected by several advantages. Being exposed to a
diffrent
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different
 culture and mentality, where
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also
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apply
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new encounters could
be
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also be
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 made.
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, a path that leads to various
opportunites
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opportunities
, students can build a new career, get a
high
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higher
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education
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, make new friends and most importantly to see something apart than their
homecountry
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home country
.
Furthermore
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, the act of going abroad itself is
a
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an
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 essential piece of building a high
indepence
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independence
 where
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apply
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 no acquaintance is nearby
and
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, and
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 they can foster their independence. There are several challenges that
this
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 particular decision
also
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 offers.
Firstly
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, being in a different environment is hazardous, especially if you are in a
completly diffrent
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completely different
 country.
This
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 means no family, probably no friends and no true caring person right next to you.
Secondly
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, homesickness is a real disease which many students get
while
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 being away from home,
by
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due to
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 the means of
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solitude
 which they are not used to
have
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apply
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while
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 they were with their family.
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, troubles
at
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with
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 studies, even though they willingly chose to get
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education
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an education
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 abroad,
sometimes they could
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they could sometimes
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 face
with
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apply
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a lot of struggles at the university,
due to
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 stress, or not being able to cope with the country and etc. In conclusion, there are obvious reasons why people go
chase
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to chase
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 studies abroad,
while
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 counting down both parties should
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count on each other
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 before
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this
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taking this
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 action.

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planning
Plan your essay before writing. Use four parts: intro, two body parts (pros and cons), and a short conclusion.
language
Use simple, correct words. Check for spelling and word choice.
content
Give one clear idea per paragraph and add a small example to support it.
coherence
Use linking words to show you move from idea to idea, like 'first', 'also', 'however'.
grammar
Keep grammar simple. Use short sentences to avoid mistakes.
content
The essay tries to cover both the good and bad sides of study abroad.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion, which shows a plan.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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