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The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. Schools should cut subjects such as arts and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on subject such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?

Knowing that the role of education is to prepare children for the
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modern
 world doesn't mean they should change the way
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. In the past
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 have been teaching all
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 of subjects
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 the kids to be ready for life. Children need to have experience in different areas to make sure about what they want to have as a
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 and
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a little knowledge about that.
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 technology is taking place in most curriers what makes some educators think that they need
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 more about
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 at school. I agree that school still should have the subjects
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 art and music
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 the curriculum. Those help their
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 to develop mentally and physically
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 themselves for life and
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.

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Task Response
Plan your essay with a clear plan. Write a short intro that states your view, two or three main ideas to support it, and a closing line.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make your main ideas clear and keep one idea to a paragraph. Use simple linking words like and, but, also, so to show how ideas fit.
Strength
Your view is clear in the essay.
Strength
There is a reason given for keeping arts, linked to life and study.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employability
  • curriculum
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • digital literacy
  • problem-solving
  • extracurricular activities
  • cultural appreciation
  • financial literacy
  • well-rounded individuals
  • modern economy
  • independent living
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