The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.

The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
people
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getting arrested in a specific location from 1989 to 1994. And the bar chart demonstrates the most recent reasons why these
people
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got arrested. 
Overall
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, the diagrams show that more males were arrested than
the
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females during the given time,
whereas
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public drinking and drink driving were the two primary causes for
people
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to get imprisoned. In the five years ending 1994, almost one third of
people
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caught by the police were men,
while
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only 9% women were caught at the same time.
Although
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more than 25% of men got caught
due to
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drink driving, the motive behind most women getting arrested was public drinking,
accounted
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for around 37%.
In addition
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, over 30% males were
also
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arrested because of public drinking.
Furthermore
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, between 13% to 18%
people
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were imprisoned
due to
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assault, theft and other charges.
In contrast
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, approximately 7% women were jailed for unknown motives, whilst less than 5% male arrests were
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reasons.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • arrests
  • bar chart
  • trends
  • age group
  • contrast
  • significance
  • factors
  • societal implications
  • crime
  • economic
  • social factors
  • legal factors
  • preventive measures
  • interventions
  • data analysis
  • demographics
  • reasons for arrest
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