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Writing Samples
Band 3

You should spend 40 minutes Some people believe that government funding should be used to support the arts, while others think it is better spent on public services. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
people
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 believe that government funding should be used for
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arts
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the arts
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,
while
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 others think it is better spent on public
services
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 has become a topic for debate. I will discuss both views
and
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, and
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according to
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 my opinion
goverment
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government
 should use the funding to support
arts
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as well as
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on
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apply
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public
services
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while
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, while
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 taking into account that spending it on public
services
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 would be more beneficial. Spending funds on
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arts
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the arts
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 would draw lots of visitors to the country
which
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, which
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 in turn
make
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makes
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people
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 happy and learn new things.By learning these things, it will bring more jobs and
money
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 into the country. It can
also
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 help the country to have a good reputation among other countries. But art funding costs
money
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 that can be used for health and education
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, which
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 some
people
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 need more.
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 spending on public
services
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 like health care and transportation
system
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systems
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 can help all
people
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everyday
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every day
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 and can reduce hardship
;
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,
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 it can boost the economy in the long run. More
money
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to
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for
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services
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 can mean less
money
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 for
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arts
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the arts
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;
money
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 must be used well and shown to work. A fair Idea is to fund both, with rules and good reviews; small ,steady funding to
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arts
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the arts
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 and clear goals.
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,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should take information from the public
and
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, and
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 reports to see
either
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whether
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arts
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 or public
services
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 actually require
funding more
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more funding
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 and
then
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 proceed with it. In my opinion,
its
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it's
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 clearly the public
services
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 which
requires
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require
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 most of the funding to make
people
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 feel less burdened.

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planning
Plan first: list side of arts and side of public service. Then pick one clear view to stand by in the end.
structure
Use one clear idea in each paragraph. Do not add too many ideas in one line.
content
Give one or two real examples to show your point.
language
Check spelling and form of grammar and use full stops.
tone
Try to make your own view clear in the start and restate in the end.
task response
The essay shows both sides of the issue.
coherence
There is a plan with three short parts.
coherence
Some good links between ideas are used.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plan
  • topic
  • fund
  • funding
  • arts
  • art
  • public
  • health
  • education
  • schools
  • jobs
  • people
  • city
  • money
  • spend
  • cost
  • need
  • benefit
  • good
  • bad
  • life
  • work
  • tax
  • taxes
  • also
  • but
  • however
  • therefore
  • and
  • or
  • first
  • then
  • finally
  • many
  • some
  • all
  • clear
  • balance
  • mix
  • rule
  • care
  • quality
  • access
  • improve
  • support
  • view
  • reason
  • example
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