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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Some people want to stay at the same place while others would prefer to live different places.

There are differing views regarding
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people
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whether people
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 live in the same place or in different areas.
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 some
people
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 think it is better to live in the same place. I support the viewpoint that living in different areas is preferable,
due to
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 offers many benefits,
such
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 as flexibility and exploring new places. Living in different places helps
people
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 learn about new cultures. Because
experience
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experiencing
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 different
culture
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cultures
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teaching
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 them about traditions, lifestyle and ways of thinking, which broadens their perspective.
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, moving to another city or country allows
people
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 to participate in
there
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their
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concert
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concerts
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 or local events.
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, they
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 their perspective and learn new experiences.
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, staying in the same place gives comfort and stability since
people
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 know the area and have friendly relationships with local residents.
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 children go to the same school and
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apply
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form close
with
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relationships with
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 their friends
relationships
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,
as well as
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 adults support each other with
neighbors
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. In conclusion,
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 certain individuals hold the belief that
people
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 live in different
site
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sites
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, it appears to me that expanding their perspective and
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enabling
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 flexibility are more convincing arguments. Xaydarova Barchinoy

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task response
Be clear in the intro. State your view and a simple plan for the essay.
coherence cohesion
Use one main idea in each paragraph and give a simple example.
grammar
Try to fix grammar in many lines; use short, simple sentences.
coherence cohesion
Add linking words to connect ideas, like 'but', 'also', and 'for example'.
task response
End with a short sentence that restates your view.
task response
The writer shows a clear view that living in different areas can be good.
coherence cohesion
There are two body ideas and a short conclusion.
task response
A closing line tries to sum up the view.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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