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Band 4.5

A friend of yours is going on holiday and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter recommend a good place that you have visited before for a holiday say where you went and where you stayed say what you can do there and what the food was like

Dear
Mr.
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 John, I hope you are doing well. I got
you
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 letter
last
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 week, and happy to know that you are planning a trip with your family. As you are willing to explore indian culture, in my perspective, you should visit
Amritser
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Amritsar
. There are several worth-seeing places within the city. Whenever
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 I go to India, I never miss a chance to visit there.
Firstly
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,
Golden
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 Temple holds a great prestige in our Sikh heritage. It is not only a tourist place, but
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 holds an importance from
religious
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 viewpoint.
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, Jallianwala Bagh is just 2 km away from the temple and reflects a lot about history.
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, Wagah Border, a border of Pakistan and India, usually has
parade
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, which is extremely interesting. Cheese bread with buttermilk is the famous cuisine of Amritsar. It is served in almost all restaurants and hotels
of
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 the city. The most well-known restaurant
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 know is
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 Grand Valley. It is both
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 budget-friendly
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hygeinic
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hygienic
. I'm sure you will have an amazing time there and
awaiting
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 your review when you return. Best wishes, Ramandeep Kaur

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content
Say where you stayed and when you went.
language
Fix spelling and use proper names (e.g., Amritsar, Indian).
structure
Keep one idea in each paragraph.
tone
Keep a kind tone and a clear ending.
greeting
Polite start and end.
content
You name good places to see.
closing
Nice closing wish.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • picturesque
  • breathtaking
  • culturally rich
  • accommodations
  • amenities
  • local cuisine
  • adventure sports
  • historical sites
  • memorable experience
  • quaint
  • authentic
  • scenic views
  • hospitality
  • serenity
  • bustling markets
  • authentic dining experience
  • pristine
  • local delicacies
  • vibrant
  • tranquil
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