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Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Having a habit of giving and sharing things with others is definitely a very positive attitude. Some people believe everyone should voluntarily give their exact
amount
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 of earnings
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 charity. I personally tend to disagree with that statement. Some considerations regarding my attitude and the supporting reasons will be elaborated in
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Firstly
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 and foremost, one condition making me disagree with the statement is the words “exact
amount
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” that should be donated. These days, everyone in
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 society
is having
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 various kinds of jobs, it could be official
jobs
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apply
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or unofficial
ones
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apply
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.
This
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 leads to the salary received every month, which could change at any time. Take a freelancer as an extreme example. They could have many jobs at a
time
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time,
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 followed by
high
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a high
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 income, but have none for the next month
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with no income as well. For someone who has
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 kind of unfixed job, it will be very difficult for them to set the exact
amount
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 to be donated.
Secondly
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, the act of giving is not always about money. It could be items as well, either new items or secondhand ones.
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, donating books for children, food for people living in the street, and secondhand clothing for orphanages. Depending on the situation and who will receive the donation, sometimes goods are more appropriate to share rather than money itself.
To conclude
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,
although
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 donating some money to support charity is a really lovely attitude, it is quite tricky to demand
people
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that people
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 give their fixed
amount
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 of
earnings
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their earnings
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. I believe it is more likely to start the habit of giving, rather than focusing on the
amount
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.
Therefore
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, I disagree that everyone should donate a fixed
amount
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 of their salary for
charity
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charitable
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purpose
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purposes
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.

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task response
Make your main idea clear in every paragraph and add more strong support for each point.
coherence
Use only simple links to connect ideas. Signpost when you change topic.
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Explain how each example helps your view.
language
Check small grammar and spelling to be easy to read.
grading
Clear start of view.
coherence
Good link words like first, second, to conclude.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic equality
  • Wealth gap
  • Redistributing resources
  • Social responsibility
  • Mandatory donations
  • Financial strain
  • Voluntary donations
  • Morality
  • Ethics
  • Efficient use of resources
  • Sporadic contributions
  • Implementation challenges
  • Compliance
  • Fixed amount
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