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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates key information about the
Coffee
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 and
tea
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 buying and drinking habits in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart in Australia over the
period
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 of the
last
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 4 weeks. All the cities are measured in percentage.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 those who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the
last
Linking Words
 4 weeks recorded the highest figures,
while
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 those who bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks. In general, the data showed an
overall
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 fluctuation throughout the
period
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. At the beginning of the
period
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, the figure for those who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in Melbourne was about 68%, followed by those who bought instant
coffee
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 in Hobart at 55%. Meanwhile, those who bought fresh
coffee
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 accounted for the lowest percentage in Brisbane, reaching around 38%. In comparison, the proportion of those who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 increased over the
period
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.
Similarly
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, those who bought instant
coffee
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 in Hobart experienced a slight rise in all the cities.
On the other hand
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, those who bought fresh
coffee
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 showed a downward trend over the
period
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 .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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