IELTS essay, topic: Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

There is an ongoing debate regarding
museums
Fix the agreement mistake
museum
show examples
admission
Punctuation problem
admission,
show examples
whether it should be free or payable.
While
Linking Words
some people argue it should be free, others claim the opposite.
This
Linking Words
esssay
Correct your spelling
essay
will discuss both the benefits and the drawbacks before reaching a conclusion.  One of the main advantages of allowing free visits to archives is that it
encourage
Correct subject-verb agreement
encourages
show examples
everyone to visit and gain knowledge about different time periods to understand the
overall
Linking Words
developments of the community
regardless
Punctuation problem
, regardless
show examples
of their financial circumstances. Another aspect is that it would benefit people to explore more than
once
Punctuation problem
once,
show examples
as the entry fee is free to develop their knowledge and skills.
For example
Linking Words
, in Chennai, free exhibition visits encourage students to consider
museum
Fix the agreement mistake
museums
show examples
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
and archives as their primary learning place to study about the old
artifacts
Change the spelling
artefacts
show examples
. Despite the
above mentioned
Use the right word
above-mentioned
show examples
benefits, it
also
Linking Words
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
show examples
notable drawbacks.
Firstly
Linking Words
,
these
Fix capitalization
These
show examples
places
gives
Correct subject-verb agreement
give
show examples
opportunity for residents to learn about different time periods to know more about their community and developments over time.
Such
Linking Words
knowledge should be available to everyone at
free
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
of
costs
Fix the agreement mistake
cost
show examples
regardless
Punctuation problem
, regardless
show examples

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task
Plan your essay with one clear view. State if you think free or pay and end with a clear line that shows your view.
coherence
Use easy words to link ideas. Start with First, Then, Also, But, So, and end with In the end.
grammar
Check your grammar. Make short, plain sentences. Use 'it is' and 'they are' where needed and fix wrong verbs like 'gives' vs 'give'.
content
You show both sides of the idea.
content
You give a real example from a city.
structure
Some simple linking is used to show order.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fees
  • Revenue generation
  • Facilities
  • Exhibits
  • Maintenance and preservation
  • Artifacts
  • Exclusive exhibitions
  • Temporary exhibitions
  • Overcrowding
  • Equitable access
  • Discounted rates
  • Educational experience
What to do next:
Look at other essays: